Here are a few tips, to help you improve.
Because when you said it was your turn, I was expecting a proper burn.
Take these tips into consideration, avoid embarrassing damnation.
A smoother flow would have been nicer
Have you considered an audio equalizer?
I find your voice a bit raspy.
(Kudos for keeping it PG)
Good job on the ryhmes, but you need to work on the lines.
You may need to take a different route, a different course.
Content is important, some ryhmes are forced:
ex: "the chances of you winning a game are lower than snow in texas,
loss after loss get very lame especially when you get very reckless"
As for the video, it's not that lame.
A few spinning images and a rocking frame.
I believe you can do better, improve your composition.
With a few more visuals and better pronunciation.
I think it's a bit too spoken,
Personal opinion, the flow is kinda broken.
There's no visual proof in most claims you've made.
Personal advice, I don't want to throw any shade.
You mention professional gameplay, Let's see your content!
I hope these tips were useful and are used with more friendly intent.
Than a diss track directed towards a member of the community
In hopes for future videos a little less sh shakey!
With all respect due, this is a comment I made just for you.
I hope you enjoy ;)